Empty Bottles – LJ Prize Fight Entry #2

[ellster_kyle]

familiarity with the
numbness born of
Empty whiskey bottles. The
Cigarettes, at least, help me
slow my breathing, which I'll
assume checks the
palpitations. So many
attempts to snag it and set it
aside, but the
Guilt magicks itself back onto my
shoulders. I think the sad
Music distracts me, but the things I
should have been will
always
haunt
me;
my nightmare pièce de résistance.

Comments

[jenwithapen]

Oooohhhhh, lovely! Here's my ULTIMATE favorite!! "but the
Guilt magicks itself back onto my
shoulders."

I mean... HOW PERFECT. <3

[the_eternal_overthinker]

The melancholy is addictive here. *Hugs* Nice work!

[fausts_dream]

Good stuff

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you! I think that may be my favorite line too!

[ellster_kyle]

Thanks so much! I love that comment, because I think melancholy does tend to be addictive, and that's what I was attempting to capture here. :)

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you!

[rayaso]

Very good poetry! I think there's been more of it than usual, and this is a great contribution.

[bewize]

Haunting imagery.

[dmousey]

"The Cigarettes at least help me slow my breathing,..."

Awesome. Thanks for inking. ✌😊 ~~~d

[flipflop_diva]

but the things I
should have been will
always
haunt
me;

Such haunting imagery! And so powerful in so few words. (I can't write poetry to save my life, so I am always amazed by those who can!)

[halfshellvenus]

Oh, what a vivid picture of despair and the difficulty of keeping away that sense of having failed-- as so many of us have at something, or at being something.

Know that there are parts of who you simply are (yes, you in particular!) that also deserve celebration. :)

[murielle]

This is what poetry is about to me, something so personal but also so very highly relatable.

Kudos!

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you! I've mostly done prose in the past, but I'm really feeling the poetry lately. :)

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you!

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you!!

[ellster_kyle]

Aww, thank you! This line is my favorite in the piece.

[ellster_kyle]

Thanks so much for your sweet words! I think it's a fairly universal human tendency to ruminate on past shortcomings, and I appreciate so much the reminder that sometimes we need to give ourselves a bit more credit. :)

[ellster_kyle]

Thank you! I consider that a high compliment!